This is such a vivid scene—“squirming like a worm under the light of a zoologist’s lens” was such a cool image. You really feel the emotion between Clara and Mike, especially over something as simple but meaningful as a red bottle. That last line cut off made me want to keep reading!
Okay but this gave me actual chills?? The way you built the tension with something as small as a water bottle and then that ending, what even was that thing?? I need answers. Also, Mike is so real for diving headfirst for his fav bottle. I’d probably do the same and regret it immediately.
Staircases creep me out. I avoid them at night. I might be on to something.
Keep avoiding them. :)
This is such a vivid scene—“squirming like a worm under the light of a zoologist’s lens” was such a cool image. You really feel the emotion between Clara and Mike, especially over something as simple but meaningful as a red bottle. That last line cut off made me want to keep reading!
Thank you, Jonathan - and sorry for the much belated reply! Sometimes life gets in the way…
No, I understand and that’s definitely true
Okay but this gave me actual chills?? The way you built the tension with something as small as a water bottle and then that ending, what even was that thing?? I need answers. Also, Mike is so real for diving headfirst for his fav bottle. I’d probably do the same and regret it immediately.
Thank you, Tarushi, and sorry for the late reply!
It’s alright- I am glad that you read it because you deserve the compliments for being such a good writer!
That's so kind, thank you!
Uh oh. Poor Mike. I'm afraid for what happened to him. That fall sounded vicious. I hope he recovers. :)
That's a horror story of the creepiest kind. :)
Oh yeah! The horror of horrors. :)